剑桥雅思10 Test1给我们提供了一篇3.5分的小作文，为此特发此文，提供一篇质量高一些的文章，希望能给想要拿高分的鸭鸭一些有价值的参考。尤其是在语言多样性和信息连接性方面。

　　(p.s.为了阅读此文便利，特意将汉语版陈列如下，同时也让鸭鸭们感受汉语和英语之间的转化过程。)

　　这两个饼状图显示了能源在澳大利亚家用和温室气体排放的信息。

　　The two pie charts illustrate statistical information respectively regarding how energy is used in an average Australian household and the greenhouse gas emissions that result from these energy uses.

　　我们先来谈谈澳大利亚的能源使用情况。heating占据了整体的能源消耗的最大比例，42%。而the figure for water heating也占据了一个大的比例，仅比heating低那么一点，30%。相比之下，refrigeration，lighting，cooling只占了比较小的一部分比重，分别占据7%， 4%和只有2%。之后，剩下的15%的能源消耗是用在其他家电上的。

　　First let us talk about the energy consumption of household facilities in Australia. Heating possesses the largest proportion of total energy usage in family unit, accounting for 42%, followed by the figure for water heating which also occupies a large percentage with 30%. In contrast, the data for refrigeration，lighting，cooling are much less significant, 7%, 4% and only 2% respectively. Finally, the remaining 15% of the consumption is used on other appliances.

　　再看看以上提到的这些家电的温室气体排放情况，与上图存在很大不同。首先，能耗最大的heating在温室气体排放方面略有逊色，以15%的比重排在第三。而最多的温室气体排放来自于water heating，32%。 相比之下，refrigeration，lighting，cooling的温室气体排放量几乎都是它们的能源使用量的两倍。其他家电所产生的CO2，占据了剩下的28%。

　　As for the situation of greenhouse gas emissions from the appliances mentioned above, it largely differs from the last pie. First, heating, which consumes the greatest amount of energy, shows a smaller share in greenhouse gas emission, listed in the third place with a proportion of 15%, while the biggest share of emissions is from water heating (32%). By comparison, proportions of greenhouse gas emissions in refrigeration, lighting and cooling almost double their figures for energy use. CO2 derived from other appliances consist of the remaining 28%.

　　根据这两个饼状图，heating是最为环保的家电，而water heating不仅能耗大，CO2的排放量也相当大。refrigeration和lighting虽然能耗比较小，但是温室气体的排放量也比较大。

　　Overall, it is noticeable that heating is the most environmentally friendly appliance while water hearing not only consumes more energy sources but also give out the most carbon dioxide. Meanwhile, although refrigeration and lighting consume less, they emit more as well.

　　TIPs：文章的语言的多样性取决于主语的多样性和灵活性，该篇所用主语的形式如下：

　　1. Heating——题目中所给的名词

　　2. the data for refrigeration，lighting，cooling——“数据”作主语

　　3. the remaining 15%——数字作主语

　　4. the biggest share/proportions of greenhouse gas emissions——比重词作主语

　　5. CO2——题目中greenhouse gas的同义改写作主语

　　6. they——代词作主语

　　信息之间的链接，请参看文章中的标注

　　希望此文能让更多鸭鸭们找到雅思小作文的写作思路和写作灵感。